I don't know what you mean by optimal English. As is, the English is of the native English speaker's comfy couch guides speaking to guides kind rather than guides speaking to audience wanting to be guided by. 

The suggestion I offered is imperfect and can be improved or rejected. As communication, it is shorter than the original and applies the dry principle, don't repeat yourself. Command occurs twice and the native English speaker may feel they are different in their senses. As sequence was in another suggestion for enhancement (and not a bug). 

You have your point of view which is from the internal technical guts of this language. I am approaching the language from the fun of Monty Python and imagery of a python pickled in a jar. I have done a few tutorials and read code with this reference guide as I would use a dictionary to explain words in a passage. I expect in a final stage of approval an editor ensures correctness of English to whatever the standard is.